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Mar. 1st, 2006 01:56 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
benchiladaIn retrospect, I hate part four of the Mo-Lan Devils. The fight was...wrong. I was trying to force it into what I thought it should be instead of just writing it as I saw it. I need to write it like it works, instead of trying to explain tiny, stupid details.
I think too comic/movie visually when I write things like that.
I need to just let it flow, and leave the details to the reader.
After all, if you can buy The Unmoveable Stance and Steer Cutter, then you can bloody well figure out how Cunning uses the table leg to pull Swift Wind from the Mongolian. Also, I'm changing his damn name. Yes, it's a real Mongolian name, and it means..."Destroyer," I think, but it's too clumsy.
I'll try to rewrite it later. Probably not tonight, especially since I need to do some more LAST SHOT work, and the next part is Hairless Kam and Lau Ching Ying anyway. Fog Plateau, HUZZAH!
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Who also needs to speak to his Chinese friends and get names and titles right...
I think too comic/movie visually when I write things like that.
I need to just let it flow, and leave the details to the reader.
After all, if you can buy The Unmoveable Stance and Steer Cutter, then you can bloody well figure out how Cunning uses the table leg to pull Swift Wind from the Mongolian. Also, I'm changing his damn name. Yes, it's a real Mongolian name, and it means..."Destroyer," I think, but it's too clumsy.
I'll try to rewrite it later. Probably not tonight, especially since I need to do some more LAST SHOT work, and the next part is Hairless Kam and Lau Ching Ying anyway. Fog Plateau, HUZZAH!
b
Who also needs to speak to his Chinese friends and get names and titles right...
